The Devil’s in the Details

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Even though we write fiction, authenticity matters. It’s the details that make our stories authentic and create an immersive world for the reader. As a crime fiction writer of a series that is legal adjacent, I believe my responsibility is to get the details correct.

My second book has a scene involving a corrections officer and an in-person family visit with an inmate. This scene was necessary to establish relationships that were key to the plot. While I’d been inside that particular jail many times in the past as an attorney, I’ve never been there as a visitor.

Like most authors today, my first stop was the internet. I was dismayed to discover that family and friends could only have remote video visits. Well, that wasn’t going to work. That had to be wrong.

TAIT Radio with BOB

I called the jail directly, not expecting to get anywhere. After numerous transfers, I finally connected with a counselor who was willing to speak with me. No, the only in-person visits were on special holidays such as Christmas or Father’s Day. Worse yet, these visits were in a group setting. It looked like I had to go back to the drawing board.

Then the counselor asked why I wanted to know. I explained I was an author writing crime fiction— a fact they could verify since my name appeared on their caller id—and described the scene.

The counselor spoke to another person in the room. After a brief consultation, the other person, who was in charge, got on the phone. “You’d have to put in a motion and get a court order. Then we’d arrange a contact visit.” She laughed. “But you’d have to find a judge that would do that.”

Since I had a fictional judge in my fictional pocket, that wouldn’t be a problem. I thanked the counselors profusely for solving my plot problem.

Close-up of BOB

My scene also required the corrections officer to leave the room when an incident occurred in the jail. In the first draft, a radio squawked out a code. Something about that scenario didn’t feel right, so I decided to call a lifeline — my neighbor, Tom, whose company provides radio systems to prisons and jails.

Just like the counselors, Tom was glad to help. He brought over a demo radio. When I described the scene, he immediately disabused me of codes and messages that inmates can hear. I learned that guards carry their radio in a leather holster on their duty belt along with two sets of cuffs and a couple cans of CS spray, a.k.a. tear gas. A speaker mic, connected by a curly cord resembling an old telephone cord to the radio, clips on the guard’s collar. The guards listen to the radio through a corded earpiece that could be stored in the speaker mic.

These radios are more than glorified walkie-talkies. Each one has a screen that displays a unique id such as a badge number or an officer’s call sign. The radios have accelerometers much like the Apple watch feature that detects a fall. If the radio accelerates, goes on its side, or is in a horizontal position, a “man-down” is issued. If an incident occurs, the guard pushes BOB (Big Orange Button) located on the speaker mic. If BOB is held down for three seconds, an emergency is broadcast.

Wow! Did I have a wrong detail in my jail scene! A small detail, but nonetheless, an important one for authenticity. Armed with my new information, I fixed my faux pas.

I learned a valuable lesson. Research on the internet doesn’t always deliver the goods. Whenever possible, seek out a person with the right experience.

And don’t be afraid to ask.

Grammar Crimes

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By Lois Winston

Like Henry Higgins, grammar crimes make me cringe. I’m sure you remember his immortal words: “Why can’t the English teach their children how to speak?” He then went on to add, “In America, they haven’t spoken it in years.” He wasn’t wrong.

Grammar Crimes

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Grammar Crimes

Thanks to my junior high school English teacher, I suffer from a multitude of grammar pet peeves. Throughout seventh and eighth grade, Peggy Riley Hughes drummed grammar into me. Since then, poor grammar, whether written or spoken, makes me cringe. I can’t help it. Those rules were burned into my brain.

Split Logs, not Infinitives

To boldly go where no man has gone before. Remember that opening from Star Trek? Cringe-worthy! Gene Rodenberry obviously didn’t have Peggy Riley Hughes as an English teacher. If he had, he never would have split his infinitive.

Sadly, the Oxford English Dictionary did the unthinkable years ago and declared that it’s now okay to split infinitives. It’s no longer a grammar crime. The horror! Poor Peggy! At least she didn’t live long enough to experience such a crime.

License to Take Liberties

As authors, we have license to take liberties with our writing. For instance, when I write dialogue, I don’t necessarily write in perfectly formed sentences because people rarely speak in perfectly formed sentences. We speak in sentence fragments. So do our characters, but that’s okay. We want our characters to sound real, not stilted.

Style often dictates that sentence fragments also be used in narrative, depending on the genre, the plot, the era, and the characters populating our novel. Again, that’s perfectly acceptable.

If you Break it, Own it

Deliberately committing a grammar crime is okay if there’s a reason for doing so. The foremost reason is to keep your characters believable. “Me and him were late for school.” works if the dialog is spoken by a young child or in narrative, if you’re writing the scene from the child’s point of view. It would stand out like the proverbial sore thumb if spoken by a college professor.

Breaking this Rule Doesn’t Make You Sound More Intelligent

The grammar crime that makes me cringe the most, though, is the misuse of pronouns. For some reason, even very well-educated people constantly misuse pronouns, substituting “I” for “me” because they think using the nominative case for the objective case sounds more intelligent.

There are Three Types of Pronouns

Nominative: I, you, he, she, it, we, they, and who

Objective: me, you, him, her, it, us, them, and whom

Possessive: my, your, yours, his, her, hers, its, our, ours, their, theirs, and whose

The nominative form is used when the pronoun is the subject of a sentence. The objective form is used when the pronoun is the direct object of the sentence or is part of a prepositional phrase.

WRONG: He invited Mary and I.

RIGHT: He invited Mary and me.

WRONG: The coach had to choose between Mary and I.

RIGHT: The coach had to choose between Mary and me.

Hopefully, the OED won’t someday decide that it’s perfectly acceptable to replace the objective with the nominative. “He invited I.” “He sat opposite I.” “The coach chose I.” Holy cringe-worthy grammar crime! 😵‍💫

However, because we’re dealing with English, there’s an exception to this grammar rule. Because in English, it seems there’s always an exception to just about every rule. In this case, it’s the “to be” verbs, also known as “linking verbs.” When using am, is, are, was, were, or be, you use the nominative form of the pronoun for the direct object, not the objective.

WRONG: It was him.

RIGHT: It was he.

WRONG: It’s me.

RIGHT: It’s I.

If you’re now thoroughly confused, you’re not alone.

Never the Both of Us

Finally, there are many grammar rules I remember from my junior high days and know not to break, but I don’t remember the reason for the rule. For example, it’s either “the two of us” or “both of us” but never “the both of us.” Don’t ask me why. I forgot the reason for that grammar rule many decades ago, if there ever was a logical reason. It’s quite possible that just for fun, some grammarian at Oxford or Cambridge decided to make life and the English language more confusing for all of us. After all, they didn’t have TV, the Internet, or video games back then. They had to get their amusement from somewhere.

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USA Today and Amazon bestselling and award-winning author Lois Winston writes mystery, romance, romantic suspense, chick lit, women’s fiction, children’s chapter books, and nonfiction. Kirkus Reviews dubbed her critically acclaimed Anastasia Pollack Crafting Mystery series, “North Jersey’s more mature answer to Stephanie Plum.” In addition, Lois is a former literary agent and an award-winning craft and needlework designer who often draws much of her source material for both her characters and plots from her experiences in the crafts industry. Learn more about Lois and her books at her website www.loiswinston.com. Sign up for her newsletter to receive an Anastasia Pollack Crafting Mini-Mystery.

Country Music and Truth

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by Paula Gail Benson

As Killer Nashville approaches at the end of August, I’ve been binge watching Nashville, the musical/soap opera drama TV series that aired on ABC from 2012 until 2016 and on CMT from 2016 to 2018. It’s now available to view on Netflix.

From the beginning, the episodes chronicle the careers of Rayna Jaymes (played by Connie Britton), an established country star trying to maintain and improve her place in the industry, and Juliette Barnes (played by Hayden Panettiere), a newcomer ready to take Rayna’s place as the Queen of Country Music. An interesting dynamic between these characters that helps to showcase locations in Nashville is that Rayna comes from “old money” and had to leave her wealthy home at sixteen to pursue music. Through her eyes and her family’s activities, viewers see the symphony, political events, Vanderbilt University and Hospital, and private schools. In contrast, Juliette was raised by an addicted mother in a trailer park. Her experience has hardened her from beyond scrappy to mean and vindictive. She confronts a lot of trouble, most of it arising from her own actions.

Both have frequented the Bluebird Café, a small restaurant/performance venue in a strip mall that opened in 1982 and has become a mecca for established and aspiring song writers. I think the series made it look a lot easier to get a seat or a place on stage at the Bluebird than it actually is.

The show has been praised because it features music as much as drama. The actors sang the songs they performed and some of them have gone on from the series to develop musical careers.

During one trip to Nashville, I met a young Uber driver who worked to transport actors and crew to the locations. It was interesting to hear how Nashville embraced the series. The driver had made enough from the work to take a trip to Europe. A great return.

My parents met in Nashville. Seeing the Ryman Auditorium and the Grand Ole Opry (which I attended with Debra Goldstein to see Garth Brooks) have special meaning to me.

What I’ve particularly enjoyed is how the series depicts the unseen aspects of the music industry, especially what it’s like to write a song. There are lots of scenes where people try composing alone, then turn to work with others to come up with lyrics and tunes. New artists are encouraged to draw upon their own experiences, to describe situations that touch them personally.

The personal connection is a strong identifier with the musicians depicted on Nashville. I know that fiction authors don’t always tell stories based on their own lives or experiences, but many do feel it’s important to keep faith with their readers by maintaining certain elements. I pondered on that as I watched Nashville and saw how language and brands were carefully chosen and protected. Maybe that’s why it is so important to write from a place and about a situation that truly resonates with you. I think that’s what Nashville is trying to tell us: being true to yourself is a quality that readers and fans appreciate and respect.

I hope you will have the chance to experience Nashville in person. It has its own special magic.

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A question or two about writing

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by donalee Moulton

A new book means new opportunities to talk about writing. Here are a few questions I’ve been asked as Cardinal takes flight. 

What was the most difficult piece you ever wrote? What made it difficult?
I wrote an article early in my career about an infant born several months prematurely (with only a tablespoon of blood in its entire body if I remember correctly) and the fight to save the little one. I recall drafting the article with tears streaming down my cheeks. In that moment I realized, for me, that journalism was about moving people as well as informing them.

What sort of research do you do for your work?
Research is essential, even when you think you won’t need to do a lot of it. For example, there were key elements to my first mystery book Hung Out to Die that had to be authentic, at least in a fictional context. I had done a lot of reporting on the cannabis industry and had the opportunity to tour a cannabis-production plant before it opened. Likewise, for years as a freelance journalist, I wrote on the health sector and health issues, including mental health and personality issues. As a communications specialist, many of my clients were from this sector. All of this research knowingly and unknowingly fed into Hung Out to Die.

Which books and authors do you read for pleasure? Is there an author that inspires you?
I relish reading. I was a judge in the Crime Writers of Canada’s Awards of Excellence this year, and I got to dive into fabulous – and very diverse – books that kept me on my toes and my eyes glued to the page. When I was younger and I was discovering the wonder and wow of the mystery genre, I devoured authors like Tony Hillerman, Martha Grimes, Ruth Rendell. More recently I have discovered writers like Richard Osman. And Delia Owens’s Where the Crawdads Sing was nothing short of joyous.

Was there a person who encouraged you to write?
My mother taught me to love language – and to respect it. She cared about words and getting the words right. She was my greatest influence.

What would you say are your strengths as an author?
I always find it easy to get distracted when I am writing. As a freelance journalist, however, I learned to stay on track. Working to deadline meant there often wasn’t time to travel down interesting but non-essential paths. You are also working to a specific word count as a journalist so you know no matter how interesting the asides, they will not make it into the article for length reasons. Rigor is required.

How often do you write, and do you write using a strict routine?
I am not a marathon writer. I am a sprinter. I can’t sit and write for hours at a time. I break up my writing by taking a yoga class, soaking up some sunshine, checking email, doing some paid work. I do try to write 1,000 fictional words a day. Some days I achieve this. We don’t need to talk about the other days.

Sci-Fi Blurb Leads to Fascination with the Author

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When a headline popped up in my feed two months ago, I did something I rarely do. I immediately clicked on. I was intrigued by the title, The Girl Who was Plugged In.

My plan was simply to explain the gist of the 1973 science fiction novella about a disabled fifteen-year-old girl who agrees to remotely control a genetically engineered fifteen-year-old girl and use it to influence the masses in a dystopian world—when advertising is illegal.

Then I planned to share that according to the entertainment magazine, Deadline, Jennifer Kent (The Babadook) has agreed to write and direct the film. So far, though, to my knowledge, there is no release date.

So that was that. Not much of a blog. Until the more I read, I found the author equally if not more intriguing.

The Girl who was Plugged In was written by James Tiptree, Jr., who won the prestigious Hugo award for the story in 1974. I further learned that Tiptree is a pseudonym for author, artist and Air Force veteran Alice B. Sheldon. Tiptree (Sheldon) chose the pen name for various reasons but also to compete in the male-dominated science fiction field.

Tiptree/Sheldon’s list of literary awards is numerous. This multifaceted woman was also an artist, participating in group shows at The Art Institute of Chicago.

Alice B. Sheldon passed away in 1978. Tiptree’s Wikipedia page expands on his/her life. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/James_Tiptree_Jr.

Julie Phillips, a critic and award-winning biographer wrote Tiptree’s biography, and won a National Book Critics Circle Award in 2006. I recently found the book and purchased it on Amazon. After reading Tiptree’s Wikipedia page, as well as the following book description, I think it’s evident why Ms. Sheldon chose a pseudonym.  I look forward to reading James Tiptree, Jr., The Double Life of Alice B. Sheldon, and learning more about this remarkable woman.

 

About the Book: 

My Path to Fiction Began with The Master of Suspense

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My path to fiction began in the early 1990s, when trivia books were popular, and nonfiction was easier to sell than fiction. I wrote a proposal for my first book, What’s Your Agatha Christie I.Q.?, later retitled The Agatha Christie Triviography and Quiz Book. The first agent I queried accepted the project, and three weeks later, I had a publishing contract.

That success led to The Alfred Hitchcock Triviography and Quiz Book and later The Sherlock Holmes Triviography and Quiz Book. I enjoyed writing all three, but the Hitchcock book was especially memorable. I spent an entire summer watching every Alfred Hitchcock film ever made, all 53 of them.

What an education that was. Hitchcock was a master of suspense and one of cinema’s greatest directors, creating some of the most memorable films and unforgettable characters in movie history. Even his villains could be charming, and his stories kept audiences guessing until the final scene. It was impossible to study his work without learning valuable lessons about pacing, suspense, and storytelling—lessons that would later influence my own fiction.

Intertwining the nuances of suspense and surprise, Alfred Hitchcock (1899-1980) always kept his audience on the edge of their seats—right where he wanted them. Hitchcock/Truffaut (1983), by Francois Truffaut, details Hitchcock’s views on the difference between these two elements and how their proper use could make a thriller a triumphant work of art. Hitchcock’s technique was knowing exactly what to tell an audience and when. For the sake of surprise, he felt the audience should know very little about what was to occur. In his conversations with Truffaut, Hitchcock gave the example of a bomb exploding without any warning. There was no anticipation of the event. It just happened, and the audience then had to deal with its bewilderment. Surprise alone did not make a thriller more clever unless it was used as a twist at the end.

Hitchcock believed that suspense took place when the audience was aware a bomb was near and an explosion was imminent. The audience always saw the events unfold as they happened, but the characters in the film remained oblivious. The inability to warn the characters of their fate left the audience feeling completely powerless. However, it also drew the audience into the story, creating an intimacy between the audience and the screen characters. Nevertheless, unable to help, the audience could only watch the events unfold before their eyes. This technique was used in many of Hitchcock’s films: in Easy Virtue (192.7), the suspense centered on an offer of marriage made while a telephone operator listened intently for the woman’s reply; while in Rear Window (1954), the audience held its breath as the villain of the piece, Thorwald, entered his apartment while the heroine, Lisa, was searching his bedroom for clues to a possible murder.

Alfred Hitchcock’s masterful weaving of suspense and surprise always gave his audience bone-chilling thrills before flattening them with his typically shocking endings.

Now for an Alfred Hitchcock quiz: What if several of Hitchcock’s notorious and psychotic characters were committed to a mental hospital? Here are six character profiles from six movies. Can you identify the characters and the actor who played them?

 

  1. This character suffers from schizophrenia and amnesia triggered by trauma from discovering his mother in bed with a stranger. It is believed that he murdered them and subsequently assumed his mother’s identity. He failed to develop mature, healthy attitudes toward sex. His anger is deeply suppressed, and his denial of his mother’s sordid past is reflected in his references to her as his best friend.
  2. The character is a cold-blooded murderer. He killed a college friend he deemed dispensable. He’s an egocentric psychopath without a conscience. He suffers from delusions of grandeur and considers murder a privilege reserved for a few exceptional humans, such as himself.
  3. At age five, the character witnessed her mother’s brutal attack by one of her tricks. Trying to protect her mother, she accidentally killed the man by striking him with a fireplace poker. This traumatic experience led to a psychoneurotic condition that developed into amnesia and kleptomania.
  4. A retired San Francisco police detective, this character suffers from vertigo and recurring amnesia stemming from a fall he sustained while chasing a suspect. Soon after his accident, he became involved in two sordid affairs with a woman who posed as two different women. He often confuses fantasy with reality. His mental condition worsened when he witnessed his lover fall to her death, a nightmare he constantly relives because of his initial accident.
  5. The source of this character’s psychosis resulted from a near-fatal injury as a child, but the link between that accident and his crimes as an adult remains uncertain. He is a misogynist. He especially hates wealthy widows. He believes he has the right to murder them and steal their “undeserved” money. His anger often becomes uncontrollable.
  6. A perpetrator of sexual crimes against women, this character’s sexual perversions eventually led to the brutal murders of his victims. Needless to say, he feels sexually inadequate. He is a very dangerous man.

Kathleen Kaska is the author of the Sydney Lockhart Mysteries, winner of the 2025 PenCraft Award for Best Mystery Series, the Kate Caraway Animal-Rights Mysteries, and the Mystery Trivia Series.

Kathleen’s hardboiled detective novel, Death Without Dignity, won the Amity Literary Award and is scheduled for publication in spring 2027. Across genres, her work is known for character-driven suspense, socially conscious themes, and a generous touch of humor. She lives in the Pacific Northwest and continues to write both series and standalone crime fiction.

Kathleen Kaska

Her latest Sydney Lockhart mystery, Murder at the Faust, will be out in print on September 8. The eBook now available.

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I Failed a Lie Detector Test

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I’ve confessed this to only a couple of people, but I’m now making it public: I failed a lie detector lie detector (polygraph) test.

This happened in the early ’80s, when I was young and naïve—long before I began writing crime fiction. Back then, I believed lie detector tests were infallible. When I failed, I didn’t just feel embarrassed—I questioned my own sanity. Was I a chronic liar and didn’t know it?

Years later, as a mystery writer, I know better.

It started when a friend asked me to bartend Sunday nights at a pricey hotel in downtown Austin. Someone had quit without notice, and he was in a bind. I’d bartended in college, so I agreed to help.

There was just one catch: new employees had to take a lie detector test.

No problem, I thought. It might even be interesting.

It was—but not in the way I expected.

I was sent to a private company across town. My internal alarms went off the moment I saw the man who would administer the test. “Creepy” is putting it mildly. He had greasy, dyed-black hair, dirt under his fingernails, and a stained dress shirt unbuttoned halfway down, exposing a thicket of chest hair. Cheap rings crowded his fingers.

At the time, I didn’t yet have the instincts of a crime writer—but I had enough sense to feel uneasy.

When he took my hand to attach the sensors, I shivered.

The questions began.

Had I ever stolen from an employer? No.
Had I ever been convicted of a crime? No.
Had I ever taken illegal drugs? No.

Then he lingered on the drug question, circling back again and again, rephrasing it each time. Today, I’d recognize that tactic immediately—pressure the subject, unsettle them, look for physiological spikes. But at the time, I was simply confused.

Finally, he asked if I was currently using drugs. I said I’d recently taken antibiotics and occasionally used Motrin.

He moved on, then returned to the same line of questioning.

If I were writing this scene today, I’d have my detective note the repetition, the shifting language, the way the examiner controlled the rhythm of the interrogation. I’d build tension there—because that’s where it lives.

But back then, I was just irritated—and certain of one thing: I had told the truth.

The following Sunday, as I was getting ready for work, my friend called.

I had failed the test.

If this were fiction, that would be the inciting incident—the moment everything tilts. The innocent protagonist accused. The system revealed as flawed. The first crack in what’s supposed to be objective truth.

My friend told me not to worry, said I could come to work anyway, maybe even retake it later.

I told him not to bother. I wasn’t coming back.

Years later, after writing crime novels and researching investigative techniques, I learned what I wish I’d known then: lie detector tests don’t always detect lies. They detect stress.

And stress can come from many places:

  • Anxiety
  • Fatigue or illness
  • Medication
  • Confusing or manipulative questioning
  • Even the examiner’s own bias

In other words, the very conditions designed to “find the truth” can distort it.

That realization changed the way I think about interrogation scenes. In fiction, a lie detector can be a powerful tool—but not because it reveals truth. Because it reveals vulnerability. Because it can be wrong.

And wrong can be dangerous.

I recently discovered that lie detector tests were actively used in courtrooms in the 1950s—the world of my Sydney Lockhart mysteries. Which raises a delicious possibility.

What happens when Sydney—sharp, observant, and far less naïve than I was—is strapped into that chair? When she knows the machine is flawed, but the people watching believe it isn’t?

That’s not just a test.

That’s a setup.

And in crime fiction, setups are where the real story begins. I can’t wait to put Sydney in this uncomfortable situation and then watch her wiggle out of it. She’d do a much better job than her creator.

Have you ever been falsely accused?

 

Spamalot (Not the Musical)

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I’m thinking about venturing into a career as a stand-up comic.

I already have a enough material for a routine full of laugh-out-loud absurdity, delivered to me in the form of dozens of spam emails that arrive in my inbox every month, specifically, the ones that offer me fame and fortune as a best-selling author. All for a handsome fee, of course.

I could riff on every one of their offers, like the one from “Elena” that promises Category optimization | Review velocity strategy | Long-term discoverability.” Wow, she’s really got her corp-speak language down!

*Chloe” tells me that my readers are in the “wellness and niche communities,” whatever that means.  “Lewis,” from the Author Credibility Society, says he’s “creating meaningful conversations in my field.” And “Tim,” from The Philosophical Zurich Club, “an international literary community,” is deeply moved by my writing.

Their real names should be something like A.I. Scam or Chat-Gee P. Tee.

In my new act, I could deliver zingers about the idiots who, after scraping tidbits from my website and other urls where my author info resides, still get it wrong. Yes, “Rachel,” I did once work at a prestigious film organization, but it was not the American Academy of Dramatic Arts.

Next comes one of my favorites so far, from “Samuel, a literary advisor at QuantumCreative.digital.”

Hi Gay,

I came across your Facebook author page and I have to say — a feature in D Magazine, an author interview, a series with a title as sharp as Sorry Knot Sorry — this is an author with genuine credibility and a clear voice. The work you have done to build visibility in the Dallas literary community is evident and impressive.”

I agree that my esteemed colleague, Lois Winston (the actual author of a book with that clever title), has genuine, award-winning credibility. However, I am the one who earned that national literary award for a series of articles I did for D Magazine in Dallas, back when I was its managing editor.

All of this seemingly unceasing, unscrupulous, and pitiful effort to scam unsuspecting authors is big a waste of time, especially my time, when I could be working on my next book instead of having to daily flush this spam down the toilet. Anyone with a working idea of how to eliminate the constant barrage, please let me know. There may even be a free book in it for you.

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In the meantime, if you know any of the aforesaid e-scammers personally, please kick ’em un the shins for me.

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Believe in your Story and Never Give Up

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By Donnell Ann Bell

I do not consider myself a vain person. Uncertainty follows me on a daily basis. And like most authors insecurity has me on speed dial. But if I write something that corresponds with the vision in my head, then I develop a strong belief in my project. It doesn’t happen with every manuscript. I have a drawerful of attempted projects that haven’t quite measured up.

My debut book, however, the unpublished title Walk Away Joe, earned me a Golden Heart nod and agent representation. Afterward, I set to work on book two. Based on the plot, the title Deadly Recall came to me almost immediately. The story was a romantic suspense spinning off from my elementary Catholic school days and my court reporting legal experience.

The characters in Deadly Recall came to me equally fast. I was so confident in that book, I almost ignored the advice offered by Donald Maass, renowned literary agent and author of Writing the Breakout Novel. I attended a seminar in which Maass warned writers that if they knew who the killer was throughout the book, the reader would too.

What did he know? I remained steadfast in my belief I’d chosen the right antagonist for my story. Yet as my page count increased, reality intruded on my pipedream. I was a brand-new author; Donald Maass was an expert. I remember the precise moment I flipped the script and changed my killer’s identity. It was near the end of the book. To this day, I credit Donald Maass’s advice. Thanks to him Deadly Recall became a more cohesive and suspenseful story.

After I finished the novel, I entered writing contests but didn’t send it to my agent just yet. She hadn’t sold Walk Away Joe, and if Deadly Recall did well, I hoped to convince her I wasn’t a “one-book wonder.” Deadly Recall won several contests, one of which included agents and editors as the final round judges. I confess my head was the size of a pinata when one contest coordinator wrote, “This is so good. Can’t wait to see it in print.”

I was still flying high until weeks later I opened my entry to learn I’d received an honorable mention. Obviously, my writing peer judges liked the story, New York professionals, not so much. Needless to say, I was disheartened. Still, I believed in that book. So, when a well-known editor from a respected house announced she was accepting on-line pitches, I participated. Her response to my pitch? “Nice idea. But Catholic stories don’t sell. Put it under your bed and never get it out again.”

I don’t have to tell you that left a mark! At the same time, I was smarting from that rejection, my agent wrote me about Deadly Recall. She said she’d shared the book with her team, and they all agreed with her that it “wasn’t my best work.” At that, I sent her a 30-day termination notice and cancelled our agency agreement.

Along with the Deadly Recall rejections I was receiving, I was still hopeful for Walk Away Joe. At a writer’s conference, I pitched the book to an acquiring editor of a major house, and she asked me to send it. I sent it, knowing I was engaging in a proverbial longshot as New York publishers rarely, if ever, accepted unagented submissions.

About this time, RWA’s 2010 Golden Heart calls went out, and I was both happy and stunned to learn that Deadly Recall was a finalist in the organization’s largest and most respected contest. This was my second Golden Heart final, so some (not all) of my confidence was restored as I felt it gave me some street creds.

A short time later, I queried BelleBooks/Bell Bridge Books about Walk Away Joe and Vice President Deborah Smith wrote me back saying, “Send it. Send Deadly Recall while you’re at it.” I’ll never forget when BelleBooks sent me an offer letter for both books. I had huge respect for Debra Dixon and Deborah Smith, both legends in publishing, and decided to accept. As a courtesy I wrote the New York editor with whom I’d submitted Walk Away Joe. All my rejection bruises seemed to fade when she wrote back, “Congratulations. This is our loss. I love Melanie and Joe.” FYI, Melanie and Joe are characters from the WAJ manuscript that BelleBooks/Bell Bridge Books subsequently renamed The Past Came Hunting.

In the early days of my publishing career, Amazon, had a marketing tool called Deal of the Day on Kindle. Both The Past Came Hunting and Deadly Recall hit the top ten of the overall paid deals. I was on my way to Santa Fe when Deborah Smith messaged me to tell me Deadly Recall had hit #1 in the overall paid category! For a brief time, my book was listed alongside John Grisham and Clive Custler. Typically, I couldn’t get a signal to capture a screen shot but did manage one a couple days later in which the book still held the #1 spot in three genre categories.

I tell you this long drawn-out story to remind you that while others may not believe in your work, if you’re passionate about it, never give up. Deadly Recall remains my bestselling book. Imagine if I had done what that editor suggested and put it under my bed. Deadly Recall is one of the books in The Stiletto Gang’s Summer Bonanza. The log line is: A terrifying memory is locked deep inside her. A Killer wants to keep it that way. https://donnellannbell.net/books/romantic-suspense-thrillers/deadly-recall/   Now that you know its history, I hope you’ll give it a try. And remember this business is subjective. Whatever you’re passionate about, it’s important to believe!  Happy Reading!

 

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